week 6 : First Draft Introduction

  Teenagers have taken for granted that they can meet many teachers when going to schools. In schools, teachers are very busy. There are many roles of teachers-controlling students' time attending school, counseling students about their futures, advising good life lessons, and so on. Teenagers get so many helpful things that need to grow well. Sometimes students are in conflicts with their teachers but they learn polite manners, human relationships and many other things through the conflicts. However, since 2011, students have spent more time with computers than teachers. They do homework with computers, learn math from internet lecture, and communicate with friends with computers. As computers are developed, computers have taken places of teachers in various ways. However, it is not a identified ways to educate students. Although it is not identified, the government have introduced computers in education thoughtlessly. Can computers really take places of teachers? I think the answer is 'No'. Computers can't take places of teachers.

1. Attention grabber -
I attracted the audience by describing current situation to students in school. Then I pointed out the introduction in education is not identified.

2. Explains the topic -
In the attention grabber I introduce all the elements of my topic: teachers' role in schools, and computers' role in schools. 

3. My thesis -
It is clear, direct and an argument.